I'm Asking for a Leave, and by the Way, I'd Like to Ask the Big Guys to Listen to the Foodie's Nagging

I didn't want to take a leave today, but after planning to spend two hours at noon to sort out the rhythm of the plot, I have been delayed until now.

Please forgive me for being too picky today.

I may have been too picky in the past because I was not calm enough, but today it is really because I want to re-sort out the rhythm of the plot of our book.

I overlooked a problem.

A big problem.

The plot twist must be there, but after going from Real Madrid to Chelsea, I want to write more about the plot of the new teammates, just like the teammates of Real Madrid before.

But I forgot that compared with the stars of Real Madrid, some of the stars of Chelsea are really what most book friends want to know and are interested in?

I have read a lot of comments and suggestions from book friends recently, so I honestly read this book from the beginning.

I found this problem.

In the first 600,000 or 700,000 words, I wanted to describe the team more and write about the growth of the protagonist, which is fine.

Because Mourinho's Real Madrid's failure to climb the peak of honor in that era was originally a regret for countless fans.

Or, to take a step back, fans who don't like that Real Madrid are at least familiar with stars such as Mourinho, Ronaldo, Ramos, and Casillas, and are more interested in their stories.

At that time, I used my own writing style to unfold the story and the development of the plot, which was fine, and everyone loved to read it.

But now, after the little lion transferred to Chelsea, I still write like this, and many book friends will feel that they can't read it anymore.

This is my problem. Foodie must admit that in the description of words, I wrote off the halo of the protagonist when I should have focused on it. Foodie must apologize to most of my book friends.

So today Foodie must go to this extreme, not to go to the end of a dead end, but to seriously re-think where the plot went wrong and where I didn't change the writing style when I should have.

This is very important to me.

Fortunately, I listened to the advice and reread the first thirty chapters, and then, I can only say... Damn it! How could I write so well before!

Haha, just kidding, big guys please don't scold me first!

Comparing the before and after, well... Foodie can also feel that it is a bit tragic, so if there is a mistake, we have to correct it. In fact, I always feel that I have not written well for a while, and my state is very problematic. Until today, I have to do a major surgery on my thinking!

In the last two chapters, I don't know if the big guys have noticed that Foodie has been slowly adjusting the writing style and the focus of the description.

The details of the game must be written back first.

The protagonist is now the pillar of Chelsea, but how this pillar plays, I have to write it in detail, how to defend, how to seize the opportunity of attack and defense conversion, how to take responsibility to drive the offense, how to appease teammates...

Foodie actually ignored these things before, it really should be done! I am still especially grateful to the book friends who brought it up, thank you very much!

Also, the plot design should not be too tortuous or too straightforward. What I wrote is a novel after all. It is not okay for the big guys to feel frustrated or bored.

So there must be foreshadowing, there must be twists, and more importantly, it must be exciting!

Although our book is not pursuing extreme excitement, with a hat trick every other chapter, but there must be a reasonable degree of excitement.

In this regard, the foodie has done poorly recently, but fortunately it can still be changed, and there is still room for improvement. It is not too late to mend the fold after the sheep have been lost.

The foodie has read a lot of suggestions from book friends on the road of peeping at the screen. Don't worry, the big guys, the foodie has seen it all, and I will correct it if I am wrong. Our main point is to listen to advice!

Today's update is late, and the foodie will kowtow to all the big guys first!

Bang bang bang!

I will continue to write the detailed outline and change the plot, and we will definitely make up for it tomorrow!

Inspiration is pouring out at this moment. Really, I may stay up all night to write again~

I am very grateful to all the big guys who support me. They also patiently give me suggestions when I obviously have problems. Really, I will remember them in my heart!

Thank you again!